Dayeon lee first draft ~!

The three most important relationships that a student has.

Imagine that you are the only person in the world. There is no person beside you, no animals beside you, or no plants beside you. Nothing is beside you. How terrible it is? In human life the most important thing is relationship, without relation people can not communicate with other people. While, students think relationship is a very important thing to them also relationship give many effect to their life. There are three most important relationships that a student has; first it is relationship between their family such as their parents. Second, relationship between their friends. Third, relationship between their pet. These three things are the most important things in their life.

“You have to do what I am saying! You have obeyed to me” this is what most parents say to their children. There are two kinds of relationships between parents and their children. First they have great relationships, they have meaningful conversation between each other also they can understand their emotion. If they have great relation ship than the children will learn many things form their parents such as, good social relationships and how to respect elder people. Second there are horrible relationships between parents and children. They can not understand each other and they don’t want to have conversation with each other. If they have bad relationship than they are not learn good mantle society and they will not know what respect is. In addition a relationship between parents and their children is important thing.

Your friends can give a huge effect to our life. When you have great friends than he or she will give you many benefit things to you, such as when you choose a wrong choice than they will help and give an advice to you. When you tried to smoke they will try to stop you. If you have bad friends they will give you bad effect to you, such as they will recommend bad thing to you such as smoking, drugging and the other things. Also they will give you bad opportunity to you.

After school you went to your lovely home and there are no parents or brother or sister. There is a quite tiny dog is looking for you and trying to play with you. These days, people do not like dog but pets are really huge part to students. When they feel loneliness or pain, most teenagers doesn’t want to share their feeling with their parents or friends. If they don’t express their feeling than probably they will feel strong pain and they will get huge amount of stress. If they have a pet than they can express or telling their feeling to their pet. The pets are the most believable thing in earth. Human can be trade but pets never be trade human.

Like what I said, relationships are very important to people. It gives many effects to people. Also students have to make great relationships between their family (parents), friends and their pet

Today, I went to life church which is in GSIS, after chapel my friends and i went to a room, It was behind audutorium however the pastor was great. After church i went to my house and i did my reading, writting and math homework and I studied little bit for math and reading because i will take a test. After that my family and I went to a resturant and ate the food .

Today, it was quite different with usual day because i went to differnt chruch however it was fun but my original chruch was better than this one.

Today, I am very tired becuase i studied a lot ^^ ? however i think i should take a break and go to bed. i hope i can have a good score.

Dayeon Lee
Writing 8th
Mr. Fambro

First draft

When I saw his music video or listing music I can feel, powerful, enjoyable, Flexible, rhythmical and surprised. Most people think Hip Hop and R&B is for man but theses day it is silently changing. A few years ago a woman entrance on the stage. Ciara Princess Harris, she was born is October 25, 1985. In the summer of 2004 she made hit song its call “Goodies” the second album was Ciara: The Evolution, was released in December 2006. There were few hit songs “get up” “promise” these two songs are represent her. The album has sold nearly sold two millions.

She was born in Austin, Taxes. She is the only child in her home. She grew up in army base in the other countries such as Germany, New York, California and the other cities. She has a great personality therefore she did adjustment very well; also she is a great leader. During her teens Ciara and her family lived in Atlanta. When she was young she loved to listening to the music and dancing with her friends. She was not good at subjects that need study. However Ciara joined Hearsay and worked on her songwriting. The group was not match with Ciara therefore eventually she left the group. Ciara graduated high school that is in United States, she began to make a song and her first album was “Yeah” After that her song “Goodies” this song is the most popular song in United States and United Kingdom also the albums were selling 2.63 million. “Goodies” is world hit song many people in world know about this song. There are many hit songs and albums. In 2005 Ciara made DVD that include her Music video such as documents, “Goodies, Missy Elliott's "Lose Control" from her album The Cookbook and Bow Wow’s "Like You" from his album Wanted. In 2006, Ciara started a new year by winning her first Germany Award for Missy Elliott's "Lose Control". After that she made second single album, that album was selling in many different European country including United Kingdom. There are many albums and most of those album songs are hit songs. Also she has concerts in Asia. Ciara is a famous world star and she has many concerts in Asia, America and Europe.

Her song and albums: "Goodies" ,Missy Elliott, Oh, Goodies: The Videos & More, So What" All You've Got, Get Up "Promise Ring." "That's Right “Goodies is a song written by American singer Ciara Harris. It was first album to Ciara and this was a hit song and because of this song many people in the world started know about Ciara. “Get up” is a song written by Ciara Harris, Hakeem Seriki, and Phalon Alexander. It was a dance song also it showed romantic either. This was second album for Ciara and it was first album in 2006. “Get up” is remake of "Somebody's Watching Me” this album was also hit album. Many European and Americans were buying this album. In this song, two girls were dancing in the club but without speaking they can understand their feeling and they can conversation with out talking. “ so what is her third album.
Chart (2006)
Peakposition
U.S. Billboard Hot 100
10
U.S. Billboard R&B/Hip Hop Songs
4
U.S. Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Singles Sales
23
U.S. Billboard Hot Rap Tracks
3
U.S. Billboard Pop 100
13
Australian ARIA Charts
40
UK Top 75 Singles
56


She is a top R&B and Hip hop star she worked really hard, she is an intelligent woman but she worked really hard. First when she have concert she practice for many times. The practice time was longer than sleeping time. It means she worked really hard. I think when we want to achieve or success a goal than we need a lot of practice. Also the amount of practicing can change the result.
Second, when she concentrates none of um can’t disturb her. I think this concentration is the most important and giving a huge effect. When we concentrate we can do anything with putting small effort.


Before I do this essay, I thought Ciara is a normal singer just like the other one but I realized she is a different singer with the other singer. I strongly recommend that people who like hip hop or R&B, they should listen her songs. She is a favorite and famous world star. She has a lot of hit songs and she is a hard worker.

late work

A few days ago I played with my friends in Bundang, we went to Pc room and we did shopping. After that we tried to go to Norabang and we met high school students. They were calling me therefore we started to ran away. Steven, peter and Richard were really fast threrefore they didn't cought but I was slowest therefore I got cought but one of their group. They tried to cathch peter but peter was so fast so they just catch me. However mt firends asked help to adult and that adult saved us.


Thrill!!!!! . Today was the most unlucky day because we met highschool students also I felt little bir of scard


I think I should not play in Bundang anymore also I need to pratice of runnning.

Today, I woke up around at 6:30 becuase I need to follow my sister and cheer our soccer team. Some of my friends played soccer today, they did great job. Also they win many games. After soccer we tried to play in Coex but my parents not allowed to me play therefore I couldn't but most of my friends played. I came back to my house and I started to do my reading, social, writting homework. I will play with Joon when I finish my homework.

I am very tired because I should sleep more than 12 hours but I coudnt therefore I am very tired and Sleepy. I hope I can sleep more than 20 hours tomrow. However today was a great day because I could watch the soccer game and I ate Korean tradtional food.

I figured out new soccer skills, it was based on prosoccer player's skills but it gave a great feeling to me. Also I realized there are many couple in this school.

first draft

Dayeon Lee
Writing 8th
Mr. Fambro

First draft

When I saw his music video or listing music I can feel, powerful, enjoyable, Flexible, rhythmical and surprised. Most people think Hip Hop and R&B is for man but theses day it is silently changing. A few years ago a woman entrance on the stage. Ciara Princess Harris, she was born is October 25, 1985. In the summer of 2004 she made hit song its call “Goodies” the second album was Ciara: The Evolution, was released in December 2006. There were few hit songs “get up” “promise” these two songs are represent her. The album has sold nearly sold two millions.

She was born in Austin, Taxes. She is the only child in her home. She grew up in army base in the other countries such as Germany, New York, California and the other cities. She has a great personality therefore she did adjustment very well; also she is a great leader. During her teens Ciara and her family lived in Atlanta. When she was young she loved to listening to the music and dancing with her friends. She was not good at subjects that need study. However Ciara joined Hearsay and worked on her songwriting. The group was not match with Ciara therefore eventually she left the group. Ciara graduated high school that is in United States, she began to make a song and her first album was “Yeah” After that her song “Goodies” this song is the most popular song in United States and United Kingdom also the albums were selling 2.63 million. “Goodies” is world hit song many people in world know about this song. There are many hit songs and albums. In 2005 Ciara made DVD that include her Music video such as documents, “Goodies, Missy Elliott's "Lose Control" from her album The Cookbook and Bow Wow’s "Like You" from his album Wanted. In 2006, Ciara started a new year by winning her first Germany Award for Missy Elliott's "Lose Control". After that she made second single album, that album was selling in many different European country including United Kingdom. There are many albums and most of those album songs are hit songs. Also she has concerts in Asia. Ciara is a famous world star and she has many concerts in Asia, America and Europe.

Her song and albums: "Goodies" ,Missy Elliott, Oh, Goodies: The Videos & More, So What" All You've Got, Get Up "Promise Ring." "That's Right (I will explain these songs also tell specific things people’s feeling)


She is a top R&B and Hip hop star she worked really hard, she is an intelligent woman but she worked really hard. First…………………..
Second…………………….
Third……………

Before I do this essay, I thought Ciara is a normal singer just like the other one but I realized she is a different singer with the other singer. I strongly recommend that people who like hip hop or R&B, they should listen her songs. She is a favorite and famous world star. She has a lot of hit songs and she is a hard worker.

Final draft

United and let’s having fun with our family!
Writing8
Mr.Fambro class
Written by Dayeon Lee
Final draft

South Korea and North Korea have been officially divided since the Korean War, (n 1950-1953) because of Korean War many people such as family and friends separate. People who were in North Korea they became citizen in North Korea also they became communism even they don’t want to be. People who were in South Korea became citizen in South Korea also they became democracy even they don’t want to. People should have opportunity of choice the government is not aloud to make a decision what ever they want to do. The government have to make the citizen of North and South Korean people can communicate each other therefore they can make or do business and help them each other but the service officer, president and the other leaders of these two countries has to communicate and they should communicate and solve these problems.

North Korea and South Korea was same country before the Korean War. The war started because United States and Russia decided to divide Korea to two different countries. Korean War gave huge damage to North Korea and South Korea, because of this war they don’t even want to communicate, do business. We have to unified again and make a one Korea. South Korea has a strong economic power therefore they can provide many things to North Korea such as new technology, corn, construction material and democracy. New technology such as a semiconductor, Korea is the most popular and has a better skill according to any countries in the world therefore South Korea can help North Korea with technology. A few mouth ago there were flood in North Korea because of this flood many people died and many farmers lost their territory and crops. South Korea helped North Korea by providing crops and food. North Korea is the only country where communism is. Russia and China was the biggest communism countries in the world but they realized communism can’t be helpful for their citizen and their self. In communism country there is no individual property therefore most people do not want to do hard work because no matter what they will get same amount of money, food, and territory with people who doesn’t work hard. South Korea should tell how good democracy is therefore their economic can improve and South Korea has to teach about effort. (Without effort we can’t achieve anything)

In 21 century, money and authority is moving everything. South Korea and North Korea was one county therefore they need to reunified. They can communicate, helping each other and do work with each other. Imagine how great North and South Korea can work together. When I read this article I was quite shocked because I never thought North and South Korea will work with same time or helping each other. In the article it said, South Korea is making a road that connecting North Korea and South Korea. It is a meaningful thing because it means North Korea want to communicate and open their mind with South Korea. People can eat food one hand but it is hard to eat, people can walk with one foot but it is hard do to walk and people can’ live with half heart. Korea is divided in two countries. It means they lost their half part of body. Imagine we are don’t have half part of body it is terrible and it is uncomfortable. It give many effect to both side.


If South Korea and North Korea be one country, many things will be change. First Korea will give a lot of effect to world economic and a military junta because south have a great technology and North Korea has an amazing military stuff. People in the world they know Korean people are very brilliant and intelligent. Also they think North Korea is one of powerful country in the world. Second Korea will give many effects to world economic because South Korea has great technologies but the companies have to pay a lot of money to worker but North Korea doesn’t have great technology but they have chip and strong worker. Third, if Korea and North Korea unified than there is no divided country in the world. Also there is no communism country in the world, it is related with peace. North Korea is one of the most harmful and dangerous country in the world. It will keep world peace. It will give many effects to world economic and the other things. They should find their half part and have to improve many things.

Without effort nothing is possible! If we want to achieve something that is important than we should do hard work and put a lot of effort to that specific situation. . North Korea and South Korea should put more effort and put more sincerity to these problems therefore they can solve. Both Korea is putting effort and they are communicating each other. Also like what said in article, if those projects are complete and successful than it is coming closer to unified.

Extra feeling, extra opinion
Before I read and write about this article I thought North Korea is a uneducated and wild country because in the news and the other country said North Korea is the most harmful and dangerous country in the world therefore I thought North Korea is not okay country even people who were in North Korea and I had same ancestor. After reading and writing about this article I realized we need to figure out how family is important.

saturday

Today, I played with my old school friends. We met in Jonlo, howevr we played soccer, baksetball and went to Norabang. There were 12 people include girl and me. Our team girl was really strong thereforeo our team beat the other team. When we went to Norabang everyone were singing except me.

It was quite surprised because all my friends changed totally. First time it was really quite but after 20 minutes we started to talk and play. However it was fantastic and cool.

I got many phone number, i got many pretty? girl phone number, it was a great day.

late work :

On firday I played went to Hakwon, It was qutie different with the other hakwon, usually in Hakwon I have to memorize the vocabulary words, read and do reading com question but in this Hakwon i have to read a book and discuss with my other friedns. I worked with peter, steven, Richard, Mary and Elizabeth. After Hakwon I took a bus and went to my house.


I think I need to talk a lot when teacher asked me questions to me. If I answer many questions when teacher ask me than i will improve a lot.


Martin Luthor was a great leader. I read his speach today, before I read his speach I thought his speach is a normal speach like the other one but I realized his speach is a special speach. He don't want to use violence to US citizen, he was a great leader.

first draft

United and let’s having fun with our family!

South Korea and North Korea have been officially divided since the Korean War, (n 1950-1953) because of Korean War many people such as family and friends separate. People who were in North Korea they became citizen in North Korea also they became communism even they don’t want to be. People who were in South Korea became citizen in South Korea also they became democracy even they don’t want to. People should have opportunity of choice. The government have to make the citizen of North and South Korean people can communicate each other therefore they can make or do business and help them each other but the service officer, president and the other leaders of these two countries has to communicate and they should communicate and solve these problems.

North Korea and South Korea was same country before the Korean War. The war started because United States and Russia decided to divide Korea to two different countries. Korean War gave huge damage to North Korea and South Korea, because of this war they don’t even want to communicate, do business. We have to unified again and make a one Korea. South Korea have a better economic therefore they can provide many things to North Korea such as new technology, corn, construction material and democracy. New technology such as a semiconductor, Korea is the most popular and has a better skill according to any countries in the world therefore they can help with this. A few mouth ago there were flood in North Korea because of this flood many people died and many farmers lost their territory and crops. South Korea helped North Korea by providing crops and food. North Korea is the only country where communism is. Russia and China was the biggest communism countries in the world but they realized communism can’t be helpful for their citizen and their self. South Korea should tell how good democracy is therefore they can have similar mind with us.

In 21 century, money and power is moving everything. South Korea and North Korea was one county therefore they need to reunified. They can communicate, helping each other and do work with each other. …………………

If Korea and North Korea be one country, many things will be change. First Korea will give a lot of effect to world economic and a military junta because south have a great technology and North Korea has an amazing military stuff. When they become one county. Second …………………….
Third…………………….

Without effort nothing is possible! If we want to achieve, North Korea and South Korea should put more effort and put more sincerity to these problems therefore they can solve.

EOP, Last year our school used this polocy. It means English only polocy but it changed to LUP language use ? polocy. I don't know about new polocy. However I went to detention room today, because I said "I will kill u" and front part of s word. I think I should not use bad word. After school I ate met with my family and I took a Hakwon test.


I wasn't that good mood today because I had detention instead of fun firday. I hope I can have better day. Also I am very tired today. I will eat Lamean and watch Tv.

I think I should not use bad words. Also I will learn meaning of Lup and I will keep that polocy.

10-11-07

What happened?
Today, soccer pratice was kind of special. At first game it was normal soccer practice but in second game, it was totally different with normal pratice. We played Sam's team and we scored 5 times. The score was 5:0, when score became 5:0 Mr. Martinaz put Steven, Mathew, Mr.Lee and the all the player. it was 14 vs 7 but the score was 5:0. I realized and we prove that our soccer team is best team in Gsis.

Today, it was fantastic! because we beat steven's team and Sam's team. Also I bought new clothe in Lotte department^^. I think today is the best day in this mounth. I hope I can have this kind of day until I die.


Team work is the most important thing, when we play soccer. Also team work is important thing in our life. Nomatter what is it and how good is it.

10/10/07

Today, I took reading and writting test. The reading test was kind of hard there were about 39 questions. After reading test I took writting test. They gave 30 minutes to write, it was kind of short because I have to think, write and correct my mistake. After test I did chapel after chapel we did a class. I ate launch with my friends after that I played soccer. The game was 8th vs 7th and 9th grade. The score was 3:3.

Today it was an easy day because I took test which is not involve in out grade. I played soccer, also I had easy subject today but I am tired becasue I have so many homework.

I figured out new soccer skill!!! Steven and Peter, they both have shooting skill but I wasn't but I figured out skill also my driball was best(?) I think I can do better job.

test day.

When I arrived in school, I went to my homeroom after that I went to Mrs.Bae's class room because I have to take a test. When I went to Mrs.Bae's class, she started to explain the test. It wasn't effect to our grade but she said it will affect our school grade therefore I decided to do my best. At first I took an easy math test and after that I took a little bit harder one. After math test I took writting test.

At first, I was nervous because I thought this test will give a lot of effect to our grade but after this test is not affecting to our grade therefore I started to take a test with less pressure. However I was great because I made three goals during soccer practice.


I think I need work hard and read more book because when I wrote a story and correct my writting it was really bad therefore I think I need study harder.

10-4-07

My soccer team need teamwork, Our teammate have a great skill but they don't work with team, they all work individualy, when other team attck our defenders never help goal keeper. Also when offender attack, middlefilder don't help ofender. I am the team captain, I will mkae our team a strongest team in our school and international school. Also we lost to Joon's team. I think we should learn about team work.

I was kind of angery today because I lost to Joon's team also I have a lot of homework, also I am very tired because I played soccer and after soccer I ride car for 1 and half hour. I think I should take a break and go to sleep.

Team work is the most important thing in soccer or the other sports. Before today I tought we don't need teamwork if we have good skills but I realized we need good team work, we wiill work with team and we will be a best team in GSIS

10-3-07

Today is a national foundation day of Korea. BC 2333, Danggun made a Korea. I dind't Know that toaday is national foundayion day of Korea but I realized during Korean class. I lerned about national foundayion day of Korea, and I read a mythlogoy about this day. In this book, thaey said Hwang wong and Danggun made rules and that is devotion to the welfare of humanitarianism. I realized today is a most important day in Korea therefore, I bought a Korean flag and I put in my house. Today was a meaningful day.

Today, I was kind of frustrated because my teachers gave a bunch of homework also I fought with my sister. Also I am very tired because I went to bed at 10 o' clock and I woke up at 4 o' clock.

I learned what is national foundation day of Korea and who is Ddanggun, Hwangwong. Before Korean class I didn't know much about national foundation day of Korea and these two people but I learned who are they and national foundation day of Korea.

10-2-07

Today, Mr.Jacobsen's made six teams and the teams are kind of equal. Our team has many six grade ,few 7th grade and few 8th grade. Our team played with Steven's team and Sam's team we beat that two teams. When I see our team I thought our team is worst team in GSIS but I realized our team is best in GSIS. Also I am captain of this team ^^. I think our team will do better than last year.

Today, I was really tired becuase I slept only 7 hours and I played soccer. I think our school have give small amount of homework to us, so we can enjoy our life and can play with our friends.

I learn , new math skills and china history. It was hard but I am glad at learning.

10-1-07

Today is october!!! first!!. Yesterday I was very excitied because it will become new mounth and it is almost end of year. Some reason I woke up at 4 o'clcok probably I was so excited about new mounth. On October is my best mounth because october is climax of fall also I love number 10. Howevr when I woke up I took shower and I started to exerciseing, a few mounth ago I heart my right arm therfore I started cure my right arm. After exercising I did my social study homework and I started to prepare go to school. After school I went to my home and I did science homewrok after that I read a book and I played computer games ( Starcraft)

Today was a great day! Today is on October and I don't have homework^^. I think my life should be like this until I die. If my life is like this unil I die, I think I wiill be a succesful and happy person.

I learned, new mathmatical things. Rational numbers, irrational number....... however I learned many new things.

Chuseok

Chuseok is the most important holiday in Korea, because of chuseok Korean people get break and get time to spend with their family but most people in Korea even don’t know meaning of chuseok, why chuseok is so important, and what do we have to do during chuseok. In this essay, I will talk about why chuseok is so important to us, traditional food, and what did I do during chuseok.

Chuseok……..is one of the most important day in Korea but many Korean people don’t know, why Chuseok is so important to us. Korean people just celebrate and have fun with their family but, we need to know about why chuseok is important to us. A long time ago many Korean people did farming which means they need to do harvest after farming. After farming they celebrate. This day started becomes holiday and it became chuseok. During chuseok people shared their happiness with their family, friends and neighbor also they spend their time with people who is important to them.

Bulgogi, Kimchi and rice. There are many different kinds of traditional foods. Especially during chuseok there are many traditional foods. Soungpeon is one of most famous traditional food. Korean people made Soungpeon during chuseok and they share with their friends, family and neighbor. They put honey in dduck and cook.

Playing computer games, playing soccer, playing basketball, playing with my cousin, read a book and family trip. Those things are I did during chuseok. This chuseok was the most perfect chuseok during my life. I didn’t go to school for 9 days also I played so hard. I played with my friends; I visited my grandparent’s house, played with my cousin and family trip. This chuseok gave many things to our family, before this chuseok I don’t like my grandparent’s but I realized my grandparents are nice people also my family and I became closer.

Chuseok is the most important holiday in Korea. Before I wrote this essay, I thought chuseok is a just little bit more special than other days but after I wrote this essay, I realized chuseok is a meaningful holiday to Korean. Korean people should know meaning of chuseok and keep thinking about this traditional day.